Years 4,5,6 – Can you add a line to the poem?

The children in school loved looking at Pie Corbett’s “A Poem to be spoken silently” and we wrote our own version of the poem which seems quite relevant at this time of empty streets and quiet towns. We hope you like it!

Children at home, could you suggest another line for the poem? Start with

It was so silent/still/peaceful that I heard…

Try and use personification or a simile and have fun!

It was so peaceful that I heard God whisper through the wind (Dominic)
It was so still that I heard a rare delicate flower stretch as it grew (Jaydnn)
It was so silent that I heard a bug tiptoeing gently on his morning stroll (Aiyana)
It was quiet that I heard a paper rustle 4000 miles away (Rian)
It was so peaceful that I heard the branches dancing in the breeze (Oliver)
It was so still that I heard the groans of children – unexpectedly at home (Esme)
It was so silent that I heard my neighbour’s house snoring quietly. (Hadley)
It was so quiet that I heard the earth talking to the moon whilst orbiting the mighty sun.
It was so peaceful that I could hear families talking to each other.

 

14 thoughts on “Years 4,5,6 – Can you add a line to the poem?

  • 27th March 2020 at 2:33 pm
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    It was so silent I heard the rustling of a thousand leaves

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    • 27th March 2020 at 4:15 pm
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      What a great line Curtis!

      Well done for commenting on the blog.

      Have a good weekend and look out for more activities on Monday!

      Miss Lowe

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    • 27th March 2020 at 4:15 pm
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      What an atmospheric and thoughtful response Curtis. Great work!
      Mrs Byfield

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  • 27th March 2020 at 4:56 pm
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    It was so silent that I could hear all the people around the town clapping saying thankyou to the NHS.

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    • 27th March 2020 at 7:33 pm
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      Poppy what a fantastic line!
      We will put this poem up in our classrooms when we get back to school.
      Mrs Byfield

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  • 29th March 2020 at 3:37 pm
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    It was so peaceful that I heard magical music from miles away floating to my ears
    Olivia May year 4

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    • 29th March 2020 at 8:07 pm
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      Great use of alliteration Olivia. I think we’d all like to hear some magical music!
      Mrs Byfield

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  • 30th March 2020 at 10:23 am
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    It was so silent that I heard a my thoughts flutter in my head.

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  • 30th March 2020 at 12:47 pm
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    it was so silent that I heard the gentle breeze push against the colossal trees.

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    • 30th March 2020 at 2:56 pm
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      I love the use of the word ‘colossal’ – great! 🙂
      Miss Spaven

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  • 1st April 2020 at 2:24 pm
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    It was so peaceful I heard a moth from Africa. 🙂

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  • 1st April 2020 at 2:30 pm
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    It was so peaceful that I heard a bear eat a badger – Sienne –

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  • 11th May 2020 at 12:54 pm
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    It was so peaceful that I heard my thoughts. – Mishka

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    • 11th May 2020 at 3:35 pm
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      Mishka you are using some beautiful evocative phrases at the moment.
      I think we can all hear our thoughts a little better during lockdown, don’t you?
      Mrs Byfield

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